hide and seek

she couldn’t know

i had to play strong

i smiled and played it all off

long sleeves. that was the key.

i tried to hide them.

the scars.

i couldn’t let her see.

my innocent sister

she could have never known

me

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29 thoughts on “hide and seek

  1. Jingle says:

    so tender love for a sister,
    long sleeves,
    well put.
    beautiful poem.

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  2. Jingle says:

    scan the participant list, have fun reading.
    let me know after you are done with a minimum 18 poets commenting…

    love your support.

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  3. I shared this with my sister. Made me feel good. πŸ™‚
    Small and simple post.

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  4. wonderful poem hope your sister knows how lucky she is

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  5. Bodhirose says:

    Speaks strongly about how we will go to any lengths to protect a loved one but won’t protect our own selves from harm…

    Very powerful message here in this little poem.

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  6. megzone says:

    lovely poem dear πŸ™‚

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  7. Although I don’t know what it’s like to have a sister, being an only child, I know very well what it’s like to want to protect a loved one. You would spare them from any pain, and if they’re suffering, you would suffer for them if you could.

    Thank you very much for the comment on my poetry page! πŸ™‚

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  8. Jessicas Japes says:

    That’s a fascinating read. i do like short, sharp poems where every word really counts! A powerful story told here.

    http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2010/10/29/i-want-chocolate/

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  9. Glory says:

    So sad. So heartbreaking.

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  10. Anita (Aquarius63) says:

    Great piece.

    Anita.

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  11. I loved this poem. The message and emotional intent are very clear. Touched me…

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  12. bward42 says:

    I like the way you contrast such an innocent title with a deep, dark mood. It really hammers your point home! Well done

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  13. beautiful poetry.. a sister would love this! πŸ™‚

    My Rally Post

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  14. somewhere else says:

    direct and simple story telling

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  15. alakaline says:

    Liked this line esp: ‘long sleeves. that was the key.’

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  16. Jingle says:

    Hello, how are you?
    Reminder;
    return favors to poets who are here for you,
    do 18 NEW comments….
    let me know after you are done.
    Thanks for the attention!
    Happy Saturday! xxx

    here is mine:
    http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2010/11/today-i-write-it-down.html

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  17. yuuki-chan says:

    A few words and a whole story spans out.
    Stark. Strong.
    Beautiful. πŸ™‚

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  18. You can take this poem many ways, which I feel is the beauty of poetry. Says so much with such little, very thoughtful. Good job!

    http://mysticmarleei.wordpress.com/2010/11/04/conflict-jingle-thursday-poets-rally-week-32/

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  19. jackjericho says:

    A tight write and sad subject. Very well written. Cheers

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  20. actober says:

    one of the most honest blogs i’ve come across. keep it up.

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  21. Olivia says:

    Do I read Violence here- or the act to hide it..?
    Very strong if that is how it is.. xx

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    • i wrote this when i was “recovering” and was practically idolized by my little sister. The struggle to hide my scars from past mistakes was almost as hard as not making those mistakes again. i was terrified she’d find out what i had been through and that she would think less of me because of it. i wrote another poem to go hand-in-hand with this one, about hiding bruises and abuse, but i cant find it anywhere.
      but this december it will be 5 years since my last relapse, so i must be doing something right πŸ™‚

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  22. Olivia says:

    Your poetry is amazing…with supporters such as you stand beside us, we can continue our efforts and make the potluck event more enjoyable for its large number of entries, multiple levels or types of talents, and authentic enjoyment of poetry and poetry reading…Come in any time when we are open, feel free to ask questions and read others.
    Thank you in advance.
    Have A Weekend A Graceful As Your Spirits.
    xoxox

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